Saturday, March 23, 2013

Big Bro's Girlfriend, Part 16

Here's another chapter guys. The storyline is sort of merging with "Scott and Mitch." If you've never checked that one out, you might want to look at it. Story after the jump. Hope you like it.

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Big Bro's Girlfriend, Part 16
Cosmic Charlie - cosmic709@yahoo.com
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The evening after Jase returned home, Scott and Mitch went out together. When they got back Jase could tell that Mitch had had sex. Jase's heart thumped when Mitch climbed into bed with him. Part of it was jealousy. Coming home for the week, he had expected to spend time with his little brother. Not just having sex, of course, but just generally hanging out. A greater part of his uneasiness, however, was due to an the feeling that his territory was being invaded. Mitch had asked Scott for permission to fuck around with Jase, but he had not asked Jase for permission to mess around with Scott. Deep down, this didn't seem right. Jase had some respect for Scott, but he also felt like Scott was inferior to him. Mitch should have come to Jase first.

Not that Jase would have said no to Mitch. The kid had a boyfriend now, which was something that Jase had encouraged. Before the end of the summer Mitch had been falling in love with Jase, and Jase knew he had to let him go. He didn't want Mitch pining after a straight man for the next ten years.

When Mitch left Jase at home alone a second time, Jase was pissed. There was something wrong with the situation. Mitch came home at night, smelling like another man, and crawled into bed with Jase. Jase, who normally was all over Mitch at night, didn't want to play. He knew that if he fingered Mitch's pussy, he would find another man's cum there. The thought repulsed him.

Mitch was asleep next to him when in a fit of jealousy Jase grabbed his phone and sent Scott the pictures of Mitch covered in his cum. He made sure that he included his monster cock and Mitch's hungry eyes. He didn't include any text. The pictures said enough.

Scott was incensed and shot back a quick, "What the fuck?" Jase replied "I'm number one in his life." Scott couldn't figure out what that was supposed to mean, but he didn't sleep at all that night. Jase wouldn't respond to any of his other texts.

The next afternoon, while Mitch was at work, Scott drove over to Mitch's house to talk to Jase. Jase answered the door wearing a white t-shirt and a pair of thin cotton pants. His hair was a little messy. When he saw Scott a wicked grin broke out across his face.

"Yeah?" Jase said.

"What's the deal, man?" Scott said, "Really, why are you trying to fuck with Mitch's happiness?"

"Mitch is happy when he's with me. He might get fucked by you, but his arms are wrapped around me when he falls asleep." Jase said.

Scott pushed his way into the house and Jase shut the door. "Are you jealous?" Scott asked in a raised voice.

"Nah, I just don't think you're man enough for him." Jase said.

"Is it because I'm gay?" Scott said. "You want Mitch kneeling in front of some straight guy who will never love him back?"

Jase moved toward Scott. There was strength and authority in his voice. "You don't get it," he said, "Mitch is a prize - a fucking prize. I made sure of that. I groomed him to be an amazing boyfriend, helped him to figure out who he is and to go for what he wants. I'm not just talking about sex, Scott. I came home and you passed him back to me without even fighting."

"So I was supposed to say no?" Scott yelled.

"You were supposed to take control. I thought you were that kind of guy. I thought you were right for Mitch, but now I don't know." Jase said, "What are you going to do when your straight friend Colin goes after him - you think he's just going to give up the free sex? Think again. What are you going to do?"

Scott just stood there silently. He wasn't sure he could do anything. When it came to Colin he had some kind of blind spot. He probably wouldn't be able to say no.

"You're supposed to say you would kick his ass. That's why you're not man enough." Jase said. As he turned around, Scott lunged at him.

"You want me to fight, fine." Scott said as he threw the first punch.

Jase was knocked off balance by Scott's sudden attack, but as soon as he got his ground again, it was over. Scott was strong, but he was gym strong. Jase's muscles were built doing real work - in addition to a lot of time at the gym - and he was stronger and scrappier. The scuffle didn't last more than a minute, and Scott quickly realized that he was going to get beat. The more punches he threw at Jase, the more he took in return.

Both mens' chests were heaving as they stepped away from each other. "Feels good, doesn't it?" Jase said, "Fighting for your man."

Scott didn't say anything, but he felt it. Jase was right. He should want to fight for Mitch like this. He should have staked his claim when Jase first came home, rather than passively trying to pry Mitch away. The fight with Jase was tapping into some inner aggression that he rarely let come out.

When Scott didn't move, Jase feinted a move toward him. "You're going to give up?" he said.

"This is stupid, Jase." Scott said, coming back to his senses.

"You're right," said Jase. He lunged forward and knocked Scott off his feet. Within seconds he had Scott on his back, with his shoulders pinned to the floor. "You shouldn't fight a fight you can't win."

Scott looked up at Jase. Jase's muscles were pumped up and his nipples were hard. As much as Scott wanted to hate the guy, some part of him wanted Jase badly. He tried to keep his dick from getting hard and to push thoughts about Jase out of his mind, but it wasn't working.

Jase looked into Scott's. He immediately noticed it. There was a flash of something that he had seen in so many guys so many times. He grinned at Scott.

"I know what's going on." he said. He moved his crotch closer to Scott's face, and waited a few seconds for the heat and aroma of his junk to hit Scott. Then he saw Scott's nostrils flare and felt his body relax. "You're not the top-dog you make yourself out to be."

Scott struggled, but Jase held him firm. "No, it's ok. You're hot for me, aren't you? You don't want to be but you are." Scott tried to get up again, but Jase didn't budge. He slapped Scott's face. "C'mon, answer me."

Scott nodded. Jase grabbed onto his mouth. "I said, answer me."

"Yeah, I'm hot for you, ok?" Scott said.

"That's why Mitch is confused. You play the strong, dominant guy when you're with him, but then you get faggy around guys you're hot for. You got to stop doing that Scott. You've got to be the one in charge."

"Yeah. I get it." Scott said, "Now let me up."

"No way man." Jase said. "You tried to beat me up. You've got to pay for that."

Jase pulled down the front of his pants and let his dick and balls fall onto Scott's face and neck. Scott couldn't help but breath in the heady aroma. He'd been with some sweaty guys before, including Mitch, but Jase had a few days worth of odor going. It wasn't nasty, just a shock. Jase pulled Scott's head up into his pubes, but Scott pulled away.

"C'mon, man." Jase said, "Let yourself go. Mitch already ranks me higher than you, so in this one case, you've got nothing to lose."

Scott knew that this was true. He took Jase's cock into his mouth and sucked on the head. He was greeted with the tangy flavor of Jase's unwashed cock. He knew how much Mitch loved this. He always said that he liked a dick that tasted like dick, and Scott now understood what he meant. Jase was all man, and his junk was his manliest asset.

Scott nursed on the head of Jase's dick until Jase pulled his head forward and mashed his face into his junk. Jase wasn't going to waste a single opportunity to manhandle and embarrass Scott. He had won and Scott, who now had Jase's dick in his mouth, was done. From this moment on, things with Mitch were going to be on Jase's terms.

When he was satisfied that Scott wouldn't be forgetting the taste of his crotch a while, Jase let him fall back onto the floor. "You like that dick, boyfriend?" Jase asked.

Scott nodded. Jase stood up and grabbed Scott by the shirt. "We can't do this down here. Let's go up to the bedroom."

When they reached the door to the bedroom, Jase ordered Scott to his knees. Then he walked into the room, flipped on his XBox, and sat down in an arm chair. He took out his phone and pointed it at Scott. "Come over here." Jase said. When Scott began to get up, Jase raised his eyebrows. Scott understood and crawled over. When he got between Jase's legs, Jase tapped his face with the head of his dick.

Scott looked at the camera and said, "C'mon man."

"Fine." Jase said as he turned it off. "But only cause I don't want Mitch to see. Now, you're going to take care of me while I play Call of Duty. I don't want to cum, just make me feel good."

Jase opened his legs and let Scott at his cock. He was half hard, and planned to remain that way for a while. Scott put his mouth on Jase's balls. He was shocked by how big they were. Scott felt like he was really well endowed, but Jase put him to shame in almost every way. Normally he would have felt jealous, but in this situation it only got him hotter. His cock, which had been hard since Jase pinned him to the floor, was aching in his pants. He wanted to jerk himself off, but knew that Jase wouldn't go for it.

Jase played his game for the next fifteen minutes. Occasionally he would jump up a little in his chair or move around. His hand came down on Scott's head once or twice to move him to a new place. Scott would work the shaft of his cock until it was hard and leaking precum, then Jase would push him down to his balls. He licked the guy's inner thighs, ran his tongue through his pubes, and sucked along the shaft of his dick. Scott felt like an eternity passed.

While Scott rooted around in his crotch, Jase kept up steady banter with his friend. Scott's knees hurt and was praying for Jase to finish up. Instead, Jase lifted his legs onto Scott's back, raised his ass off the seat a little, and shoved Scott's face into his crack. When Scott's mouth connected with his asshole, Jase let out a groan of pleasure. The conversation he was having changed.

"Sorry man, I'm getting my ass rimmed right now." Jase said to one of the dudes he was playing with. There was a pause. "My brother's boyfriend." he went on. "A mouths a mouth, you know."

Scott tongued Jase's taint and asshole. Any discomfort he felt was completely outweighed by the fact that he was getting a taste of his dream man. Jase seemed to understand. It was like he was trying to give Scott exactly what he wanted. Scott didn't know if it was intentional, or if Jase simply had the ability to immediately read a guy. Jase only had to look into Scott's eyes to know that Scott was hot for him. Was he able to see that Scott also wanted to be used like this? 

Jase finally turned off the game and leaned forward. He pulled Scott's face out of his crotch by the hair. Scott's cheeks were red and his skin was slimy with sweat and spit. Jase grabbed his leaky cock and rubbed it over Scott's upper lip and then slipped the head into his mouth. He let Scott lick up the precum before taking it away.

"Taste good, boyfriend?" Jase asked. "Now you know why Mitch wanted to fuck with me this week."

Jase lifted a foot and pressed it into Scott's chest. He pushed his brother's boyfriend back onto the floor. With his foot he lifted up Scott's shirt and ran his toes across Scott's well-defined abs.

"All that muscle," Jase said, "And you're still a slave to a superior man's cock."

Jase moved his foot to Scott's mouth, and Scott almost immediately started to lick it. He didn't even half to be told. Jase's feet didn't smell clean, he had been going barefoot most of the day, but Scott licked the soles none the less.

"You know I'm superior, don't you? That's why you gave Mitch up so easily." Jase said. He pulled his foot out of Scott's mouth and tapped the side of Scott's face. Scott nodded.

"Say it." Jase said.

"You're superior to me." Scott mumbled.

"From now on, if I want Mitch, you're going to give him to me. Got it? For as long as you're around, I get Mitch first unless Mitch says otherwise." Jase said.

Scott nodded. He couldn't figure out how this had happened. He had come over to the house to set things straight with Jase. Now he was on the floor with a foot in his mouth agreeing that another man had a claim to his boyfriend's ass.

"When I'm home, you stay away from his pussy." Jase said in the same calm voice. "I don't want to taste your cum in there. If you're lucky, maybe Mitch will let you lick my load out of his cunt. Ok?"

Scott nodded again. Jase slapped him with his foot. "Ok, Jase, I won't fuck him while you're home."

Jase's dick, which had gone a little soft, was hard again. The thought of Scott eating his load out of his little brother's hole turned him on. It was the ultimate expression of his superiority over Scott.

"You'd like that, wouldn't you? You want to eat my hot, fresh cum out of Mitch's smooth ass. You'd get the best of both worlds. Your hot boyfriends hole and your new boss's jizz." Jase said.

Scott kept nodding. He was practically worshipping Jase's foot now. With his free hand he was rubbing his cock through his jeans. He was so hard it hurt.

Jase got up and walked across the room. As he did, he stepped out of his pants and pulled off his t-shirt. The full beauty of his body was on display for Scott. Jase was all muscle and strength. His body didn't look like he spent hours in the gym, but instead looked like he spent hours using his body. The proportions and his build were perfect. His dick, monstrous as ever, hung in front of him, tapping out a steady rhythm with his heart beat.

Jase grabbed the lube off the bed stand. He poured some out onto his dick and then tossed the bottle over to Scott. "Get yourself ready, boyfriend." Jase growled.

When Scott realized that Jase wanted to fuck him he snapped out of his trance. There was no way he would be able to take a dick like that. Sure, he had been fucked before, but not by anything that big and not for a long time. Jase would rip him open, he was sure of it. He started to panic.

"I, uh . . ." Scott said, not able to find the right words.

"Uh . . . uh . . ." Jase mocked. "I'm fucking you. You can either give it to me willingly or I'll pin you to the floor and take it, but this is happening."

Scott reluctantly stripped off his pants and shirt. His eight inch dick, which suddenly seemed small when compared to Jase, was still hard. It slapped up against his abs. He rubbed a ton of lube into his hole and then turned his ass to Jase.

"I want you on your back." Jase said. He grabbed onto Scott's shoulder and pushed him to the floor. "I like to see a guy's face when I push into him. You can actually see his manhood disappear."

Jase lifted Scott's legs up. He looked at the guy's dick for a minute. "I don't get why guys are always saying they don't want my dick, but they're always boned up and waiting for it."

He lined his cock up with Scott's hole. As he did, he felt Scott's body tighten. He knew that Scott was nervous, afraid even. Jase leaned forward. His dick bent a little bit as Scott's asshole tried to fight it off, but finally it popped in. Three inches of thick cock speared Scott, and Scott groaned loudly.

"You like that, boyfriend?" Jase said. He pushed another inch into Scott to make his point.

Scott moaned in response. His mouth was hanging open and he was breathing heavily. He wasn't in pain, but having Jase's thick dick in his ass was definitely uncomfortable. He wished that Jase would just blow his load and be done with it.

"Look at me." Jase said as he grabbed Scott's chin. "Tell me how much you love giving up your ass to a stud like me."

Scott looked Jase in the eyes. As uncomfortable as he was, he really did like putting out for Jase. "I love your jock dick, Jase. Give it to me." Scott said.

Jase started to push in deeper. He got three quarters of his cock in before Scott twisted and bucked underneath him. "No more." Scott groaned. When Jase tried to force a little bit more in, Scott again fought him off. "Fuck! No more." he said.

While Scott was whining, Jase dropped his body down on top of him and slammed his pit over his mouth. He rubbed his sweaty skin all over Scott's face. "You're such a pussy." Jase said, "Mitch can take it all."

Jase continued to put pressure on his dick. He was going to take Scott to his limit even if he couldn't take all of his dick. Eventually, someday, he might get all the way into Scott. Until then, he wanted Scott to know that he was failing. He wasn't man enough to take it all.

Scott got used to the feeling of Jase's big dick inside of him and relaxed a little bit. He licked at Jase's pit, and then, getting back into the encounter with Jase, he began to run his nose through Jase's pit hair, breathing heavily as he sniffed around. Jase smelled like sweat, musk, and spicy pit stink. Jase played back and pushed his muscled torso into Scott's face, making sure that he licked up every drop of sweat.

"You're falling in love with my body, aren't you boyfriend?" Jase said. Scott just mumbled in agreement. "Good. Cause this is the only man-pit you're going to smell from now on. The little man-whore that lives inside of your jock body belongs to me now."

Jase pulled his pit away from Scott's mouth and raised his body up over him. He shoved more of his cock into Scott to get his attention. Scott arched his back in pain and then looked up at Jase. "Your hole belongs to me now. When you're with me, you can be a little bitch, but I'm the only one that gets to treat you that way. No more sucking your straight buddies or begging for cock. Got it?"

Scott nodded but a flicker of doubt crossed his face. "Don't worry baby." Jase said, "I'll keep your inner bitch happy. If she gets lonely, you can drive up to campus and me and my friends will fuck you all weekend."

Jase pulled up some phlegm from the back of his throat and spit into Scott's face. "But if I find out that you're not being the man Mitch needs you to be, I'll fuck you up, and not in a good way."

Jase dug his hands into Scott's hips and flexed his upper body. It was a show of strength, and Scott got the message. He would probably have bruises from were Jase's fingertips pressed into his flesh. In the midst of the pain and discomfort, his dick was aching and pulsing. He'd been playing around with Jase - or more appropriately Jase had been playing with him - for over an hour now. Scott was badly in need of release. But just when he thought he would get it, Jase pulled his cock out of Scott's ass. Cold air hit his stretched out hole, and Jase's cock slapped up against his abs.

"That's the deal, boyfriend. If you want Mitch, you've got to man up. If you can't stop being a pussy, then I'm going to take Mitch away. Deal?" Jase said.

"Fuck," Scott moaned, "Just fuck me." He reached down and grabbed Jase's cock. Jase slapped his hand away, hard.

"Deal?" Jase said.

"Yes. Deal." Scott said. "Now fuck me."

"Gladly," Jase sneered. He grabbed onto Scott's legs, lifted his ass, and plunged back in. Both guys were so horny that it only took a minute or two of steady pumping before Jase was ready to cum. "I'm gonna breed you like a bitch, boyfriend. You're mine now."

Scott was jerking off furiously. Knowing that Jase was about to cum, he picked up the pace so that he could orgasm with the stud. Jase moved his hands from Scott's legs onto his shoulders, and then one of his big mitts came down onto Scott's face. Jase pushed two of his fingers into Scott's mouth, all the while continuing to drive his dick into Scott's ass. He was far from getting his whole cock inside of Scott, and he bottomed out around the seven inch mark. Each thrust inward ended with a dull punch inside of Scott that caused him to grimace. It was the hardest fuck of his life, but also the hottest. He was drooling from his open mouth as he imagined his guts being painted with Jase's stud cum. He wanted every drop of it in his body, becoming a part of him.

Jase couldn't believe how submissive the muscle jock could be. He was sucking his fingers like it was a dick. While Jase remained unsure about whether or not Scott would be able to measure up to his standards, he was pretty sure that he had gotten the message across.

"You ready for my load bitch?" Jase snarled. He slapped Scott across the face as he shoved his dick inside. Scott mumbled yes around the four fingers that were now forcing his mouth open. "Fuck yeah," Jase said. He pressed his palm down against Scott's face and shoved his cock in as deep as it would go.

"I'm seeding your cunt." Jase moaned.

The feeling of Jase's cock swelling inside of him was enough to take Scott over the edge. His cock spasmed and he blasted a torrent of cum across his chest. The long session had led to a monstrous build up of cum that didn't seem to want to stop. Scott's asshole tried to clench down, but was still pried open by Jase's dick. While Jase never made a sound as he came, Scott whimpered like a baby.

Finished, Jase pulled out of Scott and stepped away. He didn't want to give Scott enough time to fall in love with him like half of the dudes he fucked did. He picked up Scott's shirt off the floor and wiped the cum and lube off his cock. Then he threw the shirt into the mess on Scott's chest before Scott had a chance to catch it. Jase smiled, knowing that Scott would have to wear his own cummy shirt outside.

"Nice load dude." Jase said. Scott just mumbled a thanks. Then Jase said, "I get Mitch today and tomorrow. And I meant every word I said, Scott. Man up and remember that your cunt is mine from now on."

Before Scott could say anything, Jase left the room to take a shower. Scott's hands drifted down to his battered asshole. Jase's cum was already leaking out of him. Putting his self-respect aside, he scooped it up and brought it to his mouth. He savored the taste for a minute. Then he cleaned himself up and took off. He didn't want Mitch to come home and find him stinking of Jase's body and semen.

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27 comments:

  1. As hot as the chapter is i wish that Jase would just leave Scott and Mitch as they are and not come in between for his own pleasure.

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    1. I agree to a certain extent but Jase is always going to be a big black cloud hanging over Scott and Mitch unless and until the situation is resolved. Trust Charlie, he's never led us wrong. Plus don't overlook that Scott isn't an alpha and it's better for Jase to dominate Scott than someone else.

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    2. It is a fucking good story, but I would really prefer Jase to stop fucking around with Mitch's personal life. Jase should also know that there are boundaries which he should never cross. You portray Jase as someone who looks like he is oozing manliness, as someone who is too dominant, but in my point of view he is just too possessive, he thinks of his brother as nothing more than a hole that he can't love someone who is not as a man as him. As much as I like reading your stories, I believe this last chapter has been a bit of a turn off for me. Also, somewhere in the middle of this where you said you were stopping with this story and there was a chapter in which they actually get caught by their dad doing it, I hoped I could see more father-son or father-son-son action in the later chapters. However, you have put the story line back to where his father doesn't know anything about that. I would prefer to see things change in the future, a good scenario that plays in my mind would be to see Scott teaming up with Colin to bound Jase and teach him a lesson. Scott needs to show Jase that Scott and Mitch are boyfriends and that from now on it's not up to Jase but it's up to Scott and Mitch himself. Finally, you could put some more personality to Mitch, he looks like the all-submissive, bottom and receptive person, who doesn't seem to know what he wants, but you always have others reminding him what he likes. Mitch should probably stand up to his brother and tell him to let him have a boyfriend, that he needs to stop coming in the middle. After 16 chapters, this storyline is starting to become boring for me. I need to apologize if you feel I am too harsh, but as a constant reader of your stories, I believe you are not adding a twist to this one. I've read all your other stories (Pucked, Backetball Jock and Prof...) and they are all having sudden twists. Big Bro's Girlfriend is not doing it quite so. Alright, this comment is only because I prefer to see this story turn better.

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    3. Some of what you say I agree with although the situation with Jase really needed resolution and I suspect that's what Charlie's got planned. You cannot be a servant of two masters (well you can but let's not get into that right now!) but that's the situation Mitch is in right now. I think one of the most telling things here is that Jase didn't try to sort things out with Mitch but instead went straight to Scott. I think he did that because he's scared that Mitch would choose Scott over him, someone who can fulfil Mitch's emotional and sexual needs. Jase is acting like a child who won't share his toys, not as Mitch's big brother and someone who wants the best for Mitch. He's also lashing out spitefully, sending Scott those photos of Mitch was just plain mean and IMHO not the action of someone who is truly secure in themselves. I also don't think he's angry at Scott but rather at Mitch who is pulling away from him both as a submissive and a brother. I don't buy his reasons for his actions towards Scott, he's convinced himself he's doing it for Mitch but he isn't, he's acting selfishly.

      I trust Charlie to bring this section of the story to a great conclusion and let's face it the chapter was hot! And surely this is a twist, inserting Jase right into the middle of what was becoming a great relationship between Mitch and Scott. It certainly adds tension and I can't say I know what's coming next. I'm rooting for Scott though, he needed to get Jase out of his system and hopefully he's done that now. Plus I don't think Mitch will be too happy when he finds out what Jase has done and intends on doing with his boyfriend, Scott has helped Mitch to become more confident and Jase could well be in for a surprise.

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    4. I agree with you, I am the previous commenter. I would like to add that if Jase claims to be a straight stud (same with Colin), then why does he not do what straight studs do? Acting like a straight guy and at the same time lusting for another man's ass, even if he is a top, he still is gay. Being gay doesn't necessarily mean someone is only a bottom. Jase could be described more closely as bi-sexual, but straight? Also, in some previous chapter, Jase tried to give his brother a blow job. I was surprised to see that he just licked the head and immediately back off, saying he didn't like it. First times are always hard and hard to accept. What I believe is that Jase is a very selfish person (I agree with you), but also that he is "acting" like a straight guy and that he finds it hard to accept who/what he is. That's why I said earlier, that a nice twist/scenario to this story would be that of Scott and Colin teaming up to breaking in Jase and probably ending with Colin having his own "girl" (that would be lovely) and probably take pictures (hehe). Besides, it might also be the reason why Jase was so repeatedly saying to Scott to man up, probably because somewhere deep in his mind he knows that it could also be time for him to give his ass to another man if that other man manages to dominate him (probably a similar story with Pucked). Anyway, if you read the comments Charlie, I hope you take them into consideration. It would be very satisfying to know that Mitch can only rely to Scott instead of Jase, someone who really loves him and doesn't see him only for his own pleasure.

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    5. (Previous commentator to you too!)

      You're absolutely right, you'd be amazed at how many so called dominant guys are actually quite excited by the thought of submitting but are truly scared about taking that step. That may well apply to Jase and could explain some of his attitude. True alphas are very rare, I've only met a tiny number and most of the, are secure enough in their sexuality to know that if the right guy comes along they could well find themselves submitting.

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  2. I appreciate all the previous posts, but possibly, Jase is just having trouble accepting his sexuality and the fact he may truly be in love with his little brother. I remember an early chapter where Mitch thought out loud about his brother never really being too much in touch with his own emotions and feelings. Personally, I would like to see Jase and Mitch become real lovers, albeit with Jase and Mitch both modifying their respective top/bottom roles, if only a little bit. I also want Scott and Mitch to become really good friends and for Scott to accept that he is a beta who loves being both a top and bottom at times.

    Also, just a point of clarification to the poster at 7:24 a.m. - Jase's and Mitch's father does know about their sexual relationship. When they excused themselves after dinner in Part 15 to head off to bed early, their dad smiled to himself because he knew they were going to fuck.

    I love the twists this plot has taken and Charlie has not let us down thus far. Great job, Charlie! And I love how you have provoked all our commments and thoughts.
    --Brett

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    1. Of all the possible outcomes, Jase and Mitch becoming proper lovers is the one I would enjoy least. They couldn't be a proper couple and would have to hide themselves away forever. Mitch and Scott could have a genuinely wonderful relationship but Jase and Mitch never could. Plus Scott and Mitch are either already in love or are certainly heading that way, it would really be sad for that to be broken apart.

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    2. I'm the 7:24 am poster. I realize you are right and I've probably missed that little part. However, the idea of Jase and Mitch becoming brothers doesn't sound like a good scenario. If that happens, then what's the point of the 'Scott and Mitch' spin off stories? Wouldn't be unfair for Scott to end up just being really good friends with Mitch? Mitch should be able to make up his mind and choose between Scott, who seems as the person who loves and respects him most and Jase, who in my opinion acts so selfishly and only cares about the sex and his pleasure. To this point, Jase should let his brother enjoy his life with whoever he likes to be with and not mess around with his boyfriends and in addition open up and explore his sexuality before someone else explores it for him. The storyline is good, but not as good as it was in the chapters before Jase went to college. Besides, why did you continue with this story if you meant to end it 3 or 4 chapters ago? Since you are taking this story too far, I would suggest you give it some proper spice.. well something I already mentioned earlier. Like your stories and keep writing them.

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  3. (The first commenter)
    Wow this is gonna be a lot for Charlie to read :) :)
    Agree with the above posts for Jase to back away from Mitch's life and understand his own feelings and sexuality and for Mitch to make a decision as to with whom he wants to be with.

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  4. Or maybe Mitch will get pissed and disgusted with all this testosterone-induced drama and decide to be with women? JUST KIDDING!! I just wanted to inject a little levity into our very serious discussion. All kidding aside, it sure is fun analyzing the situation and speculating on possible outcomes.
    --Brett

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    1. Ok I've changed my mind, this would be my least preferred outcome!!!!!

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  5. This is awesome guys. I do have plans to resolve some of this. I don't know if everyone will agree with how it goes, but I'll try to make it hot in any case.

    As to why I came back to this story - when I stopped writing it, I was sick of it and it didn't seem like there was anywhere left to go. I wrote chapter 14 for fun - because it gave me a boner and I shoot a big load after I write for a while. Then, I noticed that there was away to inject some drama into the Scott and Mitch story, which I thought was getting a little stale. It might take me a while to write it all up, but I think I have a way to create a good resolution for Scott and Mitch.

    As for the dad/son stuff - I want to pursue that in it's own story. As much as I like these characters, I think I could do a much hotter dad /son story with new guys. If you've got ideas, let me know
    Charlie

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    1. I'm the 7:24 am poster again (I know I am getting annoying). I hope what you mean by good resolution to Scott and Mitch is by not making them just friends. If you want a guaranteed big load, trust me, I would prefer Scott and Mitch to be together and Jase resolving to his newly introduced sexuality. Don't disappoint us! May the force be with you!!! :D

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  6. SCOTT SCOTT SCOTT!!!

    You know who I'm barracking for Charlie :)

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  7. Scott and Mitch together please

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  8. Don't make Jase or Colin gay. They are steaming hot as they are. Any story with either of them is very hot. Without either of them not so much. Hope you don't get into "romance" type stuff. Don't need that. Just alpha males dominating weaker males is enough.
    You are definitely the HOTTEST writer on Nifty right now. (Used to be Percxyz but I guess he's not writing anymore. Also liked Desertmac's Tercet.) So don't stop writing!!! Please!

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    1. Percxyz still writes every now and then. He put a really hot story up about twins a while back. His stuff is mind-blowingly hot, and the comparison is really flattering. I blew so many loads reading Dominated by Doug - I was like seventeen when he wrote that - I still reread it every so often to remember my teen years beating off in my parents basement.

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  9. technically, they are gay or bisexual anyway. They just seem to not accept it. The same thing happened to Ben in Pucked and the story turned out to be much hotter than keeping Ben "straight". I think with Jase's attitude he deserves to be shown how it feels to be dominated.

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    1. Disagree with the above. Didn't like the way Ben got dominated. Not everyone has to be "weak" or "secretly" gay. And not everyone is. There are alpha males in the world.

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    2. Of course there are real alphas but there are dozens more guys who are playing the alpha role to hide their own inadequacies or simply because they haven't met that guy yet to whom they will submit.

      Every alpha I know is well aware of the fact that there could be a guy out there who could get them onto their knees just as they have taken down many men themselves who until that point thought they were invincible. That's not necessarily weakness, it just means they're not as strong as someone else. It's an animalistic thing, the alpha is a target for the other males to aim at.

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    3. Could be but real men don't submit.

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    4. I don't disagree but then they don't get insecure and act out of spite like Jase did in this chapter. Don't make the mistake of assuming that because Jase is strong and aggressive that somehow makes him a real man.

      The point I'm making is that genuine alpha men are very rare and there is always the possibility that no matter how alpha they are there's someone else who is that little bit more dominant out there. And who says they get the choice whether to submit or not, Ben didn't in Pucked. And I'm sure that if Scott had won the fight with Jase he would have pressed home his advantage by taking Jase. It's primal stuff.

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    5. I think a lot of it is about competition. Every real 'alpha' guy I've known was hyper-competitive. When you're like that, you know you might lose. I don't like being submissive very much, but sometimes guys just beat me. Ben came up against guys who were stronger, more dominant, better organized, and he lost. A genuine Alpha, I think, knows that this is a possibility.

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  10. Yes, they know it's a possibility. But I'd rather read about winners, about alpha men, real men dominating weaker ones, especially if the weaker ones don't realize they are attracted to men)--not showing how weak alphas can "really" be "underneath" it all. Someone mentioned Percxyz--his stories are all about alpha men and they don't end up "submitting." (I have read his stories so many times I think I have them memorized!) Same with Mark Wild's stories. Very hot stuff!! Keep writing, Charlie. Maybe use Colin more??

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    1. I suspect we're not going to agree but I'd make a couple of points here.

      First we don't know yet where Charlie is heading with this story but to go down the route you're suggesting would, I believe undermine a lot of what's come before, especially in the Scott and Mitch branch of the story.

      Second there are hundreds if not thousands of stories out there that deal with the situation that you want to read about. Charlie's stories deal with that but they offer something else including a romantic aspect to the D/s world and a look at what happens when one alpha conflicts with another. Surely it's all equally valid and there's room for all the different types of story to exist? Not every story needs to stick to the same template does it? Nobody's forcing you to read Charlie's work and if it's not floating your boat then I'm sure you'll find something else that will.

      Charlie's stories are about winners but the winner isn't always the person you'd expect. Why is it ok in your eyes to write about someone submitting who doesn't realise they are attracted to men but not someone who doesn't realise they might actually enjoy submitting despite previously always being a top?

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  11. Charlie--I just wanted to say that you have a real knack for writing dialog. I think it's the dialog that makes your stories so hot. You seem to know exactly what Jase would say for example. Not every writer can write dialog that is realistic and that sounds so hot!

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